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Top Ten Techniques to Revise your Writing©
By Kim Tomsic
I recently met with a group of children’s book
writers for a brain storming session on revision techniques.
1. Choose strong verbs
to make your sentences active NOT passive.
3. WATCH
OUT FOR “STARTS”. Avoid having your character “start” or “begin” something.
Don’t have him start walking down the street or begin making dinner. Think like
Nike™—just do it! The exception: “Started”
works when the character begins to do something, but then stops, i.e. “I started to close the door, but the
stranger caught it with his foot.”
4. SHOWING MAKES FOR MORE INTERESTING
PROSE. Duh! As writers, we’ve heard this a gazillion
times—show don’t tell. But we still make the mistake of telling. Not to worry,
that’s what revisions are for! When editing your manuscript, weigh every sentence
in your story. Does it show or does it tell? I have an amazing example borrowed
from Matt de la Pena’s book We Were Here.
In the book the main character is smack in the middle of a first kiss. Instead of giving the reader a “tell” line
like, “I was nervous” or “I felt awkward” the author shows how the character felt
by writing,
“On the outside I tried to make
like everything was super smooth and calm and my palms were dry as hell, but
inside my mind was thinking all kinds of crazy thoughts like: How long do I
keep my mouth open? And when do I turn my face? And how much tongue do I use? And
where do I put my hands? And how are we supposed to breathe?”(255).
5.
LISTEN
TO THE VOICE. Ask yourself if each line meets the
voice you intend to convey. Read it aloud and think of your audience. If you
get bored with the sound of your prose, your audience will grow bored, too. Next,
have somebody else read your story aloud and listen to the words with fresh
ears (especially picture book writers). You may hear the reader emphasize words
you did not intend to highlight, or you may hear the story exactly as you
anticipated.
6.
DO
THE EXTRA WORK. If you know your writing weaknesses,
search your manuscript for those problem areas. Read books in your genre. Use
tools—author John
McPhee advises writers to skip the thesaurus and use the
dictionary when looking for better words. He says the dictionary gives the subtle
nuances around the meaning of words and can inspire better choices.
7.
Keep
a rules book, especially if your story has magic. And
let your readers in on the rules, so they understand the stakes. Also make a
timeline for your story to keep things in sync. I remember one author saying
his copy editor found he had eight weeks in his October!
8.
Make
a check list to see if your story contains
satisfying plot elements.
¨ Does your character have a want (and does reader want to root for MC)?
¨ Is there an inciting incident?
¨ Does your story have real stakes and tension?
¨ Does your main character (m.c.) make things
happen, instead of having a bunch of things happen to him?
¨ Do you have a compelling antagonist vs. a
gratuitous antagonist?
¨ Do you have interesting subplots?
¨ Does your m.c. make a big decisions that
propels him through a couple of “doorways” ? A doorway, in my eyes, is a point
of no return—imagine toothpaste squeezing out of a tube, once you squeeze it
out, you can’t put it back in. Some giant examples include: killing someone,
announcing a kids secret over the school’s loudspeakers, burning down a
building…those are all things you can’t undo…you can’t unkill (in most books),
you can’t untell, you can’t unburn. **Please note—the doorways happen when your
main character makes a decision, NOT when something happens to your main
character.
¨ Do
you have a second doorway? I hope so!
¨ Do you have a black moment when your main
character almost gives up or feels at his low?
¨ Do you have a showdown moment and/or a climax?
¨ Does your main character change by the end of
the story?
¨ Did you tie up loose ends?
9.
JOIN A CRITIQUING GROUP. Get involved in a critiquing group and listen to
at least some of the advice. Be a good receiver and a good reviewer. We get so
close to our work, it's hard to hear it clearly after a while. The more you
critique somebody's work, the more you're able to see the flaws that need
fixing in your own manuscript.
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